Rebel Treatment: a #FreestyleFriday #sonnet #haibun

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photo by michael baumann, flickr

 

 

starlight

listening to the frogs

croaking

 

Revolutionary Hudson river

The Dutch named your greatest width Tappan Zee.

Your waters ever a generous giver,

bearing fish and trade goods down to the sea.

How many shots Red Coats and Patriots trade

along your vast and everstretching shore?

How many sons’ blood, sweat, and tears were paid,

before a country rose and said, “no more!”

So brown your waters from our pollution,

So soon those industries depart for good!

Fortune spent, we seek your absolution

on bended knee, so humble, as we should!

But now I cross you every work day

Another obstacle along my way

 

Milky Way

an empty wine glass

in the sink

 

Jilly hoped that I would write a sonnet. Challenge accepted! NaPoWriMo.net offers an optional prompt to write a poem that involves rebellion. I coopted the Shakespearean sonnet to forge a poetic haibun about a revolutionary river that I ultimately rebels against–a river whose name lives in my heart, as today’s Real Toads’ prompt calls for!

 

#GloPoWriMo2018  / #NaPoWriMo2018  20/30

NaPoWriMo 2018

 

 

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24 responses to “Rebel Treatment: a #FreestyleFriday #sonnet #haibun”

  1. Sherry Blue sky Avatar

    Wonderfully done, Frank, and you nailed a few prompts with one wonderful poem.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Sherry! 😀 I rose to the challenge!

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  2. jazzytower Avatar

    Beautifully done Frank. The word sonnet intimidates me. Ole English lit class I guess.

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  3. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar Avatar

    I visit my children in NYC and I plan on driving up the Hudson, in and out of historic towns I hope and to just soak it all in. Loved this inspiration.

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  4. kanzensakura Avatar

    The Hudson River Valley is still a place of dreams. Lovely.

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  5. merrildsmith Avatar

    Well done, Frank. We’ve driven over that bridge, but never at night.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Merril! I went nostalgic on the bridge photo selection. The westbound lanes of the new TZ bridge are up, and the rest will be by the end of this year:

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      1. merrildsmith Avatar

        The last time we went over, there was still construction. It’s taken quite a while to complete.

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      2. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

        The westbound lanes currently allow traffic both ways.

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  6. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    This is absolutely exquisite, Frank!😍💖

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Sanaa! 🙂

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  7. Rosemary Nissen-Wade Avatar

    You certainly made it all work!

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Rosemary! 🙂

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  8. Al Gallia Avatar

    Frank, beautiful and personal…a bit of nostalgia and sadness that relates to so many rivers in the world today.

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  9. jillys2016 Avatar

    YAY!!! The Haiku Master goes Shakespeare and does it brilliantly!!! Your closing line – another obstacle – hints that crossing the bridge is something to be dealt with. (Were it me, I would find a job on my side of the river – bridges like that are beautiful to look at from the shore and terrifying from the summit.) I really enjoyed how you book-ended this with frogs and a wine glass. Take a bow!!

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      “Thank you, thank you. I’ll be here all week!” 🙂

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  10. kim881 Avatar

    I love that your poetic haibun begins and ends with an astral haiku, Frank! I also love your history of the Hudson and the way you ask the river for absolution..

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Kim! 😀

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  11. paul scribbles Avatar

    It is a well penned piece Frank and there is much to love here, whichever prompt it connects to…However for me the closing Haiku is sensational…a galaxy down the plug hole.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Paul! 😀

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks for the link! 🙂

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