A Cascade of War Paint

#Haiku Happenings #7: Dave Madden’s latest #senryu for my current #Haikai Challenge!

His forehead’s cut gushed,

Like a bloody waterfall,

From an elbow’s slice.

Published by Frank J. Tassone

Husband, Father, Writer, Teacher. American Haijin. Because Haikai matters! View all posts by Frank J. Tassone

Jordan Hoggard says:

July 29, 2020 at 5:21 pm

Excellent. Love the last line being so stripped down and simple and as sharp as a full tang tempered steel knife that has just painted the fluid landscape of the 1st 2 lines.

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- Frank J. Tassone says:
  
  July 29, 2020 at 6:32 pm
  
  Dave Madden is the real deal! 😉
  
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  - Jordan Hoggard says:
    
    July 29, 2020 at 6:34 pm
    
    Yup! 🙂
    
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Jordan Hoggard says:

July 29, 2020 at 5:22 pm

I’ve been in that spot, been in that spot on both sides of the elbow. Your haiku embraces that place, from both sides.

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- Frank J. Tassone says:
  
  July 29, 2020 at 6:32 pm
  
  Thank you for the feedback, but I reblogged Dave Madden’s senryu for my challenge. 😉
  
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  - Jordan Hoggard says:
    
    July 29, 2020 at 6:34 pm
    
    Oh, 🙂 I meant the elbow. So, Dave Madden’s Senryu embraces that place, from both sides. Still excellent. Thanks for clarifying.
    
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