Going Somewhere? A #sonnet #haibun

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The woosh of passing wind as I move on,

the bam!bam!bam! of hammers fall away.

These wheels that crunch on gravel just beyond,

a highway exit ramp to the blue way,

where life slows down with every town I pass;

and burdens born from crow-caws to day’s rind

yeild to a precious peace I know won’t last,

but let the growls of grief slip from my mind.

Where, then, can I lay my head for the night,

remembering her ever-waking snores,

until the clock’s cukoo at dawn’s first light,

set’s me once more on my own tour-du-force?

But where else can my happiness endure

than in your arms like all our days before?

 

 

cricket songs

silence from your side

of our bed

 

 

for Real Toadsย Going Going Gone! (Midweek Prompt!) (imagined by Karin Gustafson)

 

dVerse Poets’ Pubย Meet the bar withย Onomatopoeia (pubtended by Bjรถrn Rudberg)

 

 

 

 

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37 responses to “Going Somewhere? A #sonnet #haibun”

  1. revivedwriter Avatar

    What a great idea, to have the first part of a haibun be a sonnet! It’s well written, too.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  2. Victoria Stuart Avatar
    Victoria Stuart

    Oh, my heart stopped when I reached the end. The sound of crickets as the measure of grief. This is stunning.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you, Victoria!

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  3. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    Nice concluding two lines of the sonnet.

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  4. Mary (tqhousecat) Avatar

    The ending hushed me! I feel the grief. Nicely written.

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  5. Charmed Chaos Avatar

    The grief is palpable Frank.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you, Linda!

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  6. whimsygizmo Avatar

    An onomatopoeia sonnet haibun? Genius. Those last lines stabbed me in the heart.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, De Jackson! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  7. V.J. Knutson Avatar

    The beginning reminded me of when I used to work in the city and live in the country – the sound of gravel a signal to unwind. But then, the poem turned to such heartbreak. Well done.

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  8. ManicDdaily Avatar

    Kind of a wonderful stream of consciousness here. Very vivid. Thanks. k.

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  9. kanzensakura Avatar

    The last lines are heart rending. Sad and the grief is very much in evidence

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  10. rothpoetry Avatar

    Ha… to endure snoring is true love!! Great poem… the sounds really came through

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      ๐Ÿ˜€ Thank you, Dwight!

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      1. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

        Reminds me of Shakespeare’s Sonnet 130…

        My mistress’ eyes are nothing like the sun;
        Coral is far more red than her lips’ red;
        If snow be white, why then her breasts are dun;
        If hairs be wires, black wires grow on her head.
        I have seen roses damask’d, red and white,
        But no such roses see I in her cheeks;
        And in some perfumes is there more delight
        Than in the breath that from my mistress reeks.
        I love to hear her speak, yet well I know
        That music hath a far more pleasing sound;
        I grant I never saw a goddess go;
        My mistress, when she walks, treads on the ground:
        And yet, by heaven, I think my love as rare
        As any she belied with false compare.

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      2. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

        ๐Ÿ™‚ It may have been in the back of my mind. I certainly wanted a heroic couplet to close the sonnet!

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  11. Truedessa Avatar

    A sonnet my favorite form – and the ending makes the heart pause…

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  12. Singledust Avatar

    the cricket sounds a dull replacement

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  13. kim881 Avatar

    Nicely done, Frank, and I love the phrase ‘let the growls of grief slip from my mind’.

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  14. annell4 Avatar

    I enjoyed your poem.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  15. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    To use Onomatopoeia in a sonnet is so great… also Shakespeare realized how much pentameter and onomatopoeia works together. Also love how you tied it with alliteration to make it work… great work

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Bjorn! It has been some time since I wrote a sonnet-haibun. This prompt inspired it! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  16. Jules Avatar

    I mix up different verse forms with haiku all the time ๐Ÿ˜‰
    I enjoyed your sonnet and haiku.
    Sonnets are a tricky wicket for me. ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Jules! ๐Ÿ˜€Sonnets are an effort for me, too! ๐Ÿ˜†

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  17. Sherry Blue Sky Avatar

    This is wonderful in rhythm and rhyme, your imagery is stellar, and oh those closing lines. My new favourite of yours, Frank.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Why, thank you, Sherry! I appreciate that! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  18. lillian Avatar

    Wonderfully done. And a poignant haiku.

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