#Throw-down Thursday #2: an #ErasurePoem for #dVerse Poets Pub…#haiku

Victoria over at dVerse invites us to find poetry through the erasure of lines from a larger text. I go big with this excerpt from Basho:

The glory of three generations of Fujiwara vanished in the space of a dream; the remains of the Great Gate stood two miles in the distance. Hidehira’s headquarters had turned into rice paddies and wild fields. Only Kinkeizan, Golden Fowl Hill, remained as it was. First, we climbed Takadachi, Castle-on-the-Heights, from where we could see the Kitakami, a broad river that flowed from the south. The Koromo River rounded Izumi Castle, and at a point beneath Castle-on-the-Heights, it dropped into the broad river. The ancient ruins of Yasuhira and others, lying behind Koromo Barrier, appear to close off the southern entrance and guard against the Ainu barbarians. Selecting his loyal retainers, Yoshitsune fortified himself in the castle, but his glory quickly turned to grass. “The state is destroyed, / rivers and hills remain. / The city walls turn to spring, / grasses and trees are green. “With these lines from Tu Fu in my head, I lay down my bamboo hat, letting the time and tears flow (Shirane, pp. 237-8).

My haiku:

 

three generations

ancient ruins of Yasuhira

quickly turned to grass

 

 

 

 

 

 

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18 responses to “#Throw-down Thursday #2: an #ErasurePoem for #dVerse Poets Pub…#haiku”

  1. peterfrankiswrites Avatar

    And in those three lines find the entire military venture, the fortifications, the imposing castle, the strategy, the ambition, the armies and the futility of it all. Bravo.

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  2. Vivian Zems Avatar

    This is why I love a good haiku. Straight to the point!

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  3. jillys2016 Avatar

    Knew in an instant that the lines were Basho before I read your intro; so crisp. You peel away the onion layers and go directly to the heart with your Haiku, Frank. Deeply troubling and yet beautiful.

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  4. Victoria C. Slotto Avatar

    Frank, this is just wonderful. What could be better then using Basho to write a haiku Erasure poem?

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Victoria! 😀

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  5. jazzytower Avatar

    That’s going big alright. With really great results! 🙂

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  6. Beverly Crawford Avatar

    What a wonderful you’ve extracted, brief and gripping!

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  7. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    One has to serve traditions to keep them around.

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  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    Love how you used Basho to make haiku… maybe it can be used in reverse as well (expanding haiku into prose)

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Bjorn! Basho pioneered haibun as well as haiku. I imagine his haiku could be poetically engineered to produce haibun or prose-poetry.

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  9. MNL Avatar

    thanks for sharing the text with the poem. your haiku was great at distilling it to an essence

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