A Whisper in the Wind: a #ghazal #renga soliloquy for #dversepoets

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As the clouds gather… only a whisper in the wind

As the first rains fall… only a whisper in the wind

 

an unseen sunset… a return to an empty house

not a soul in sight…only a whisper in the wind

 

only one more cough… a memory of company

not a light turned on…only a whisper in the wind

 

Were those words worth it…such sweet pride in walking away?

now so much silence…only a whisper in the wind

 

simple twist of fate…this lost American Haijin

one decision made…only a whisper in the wind

 

Paul Scribbles hosts tonight’s MTB over at dVerse. He calls for a ghazal, which he describes as:

The ghazal is a traditional Arabian verse form with the first two lines ending in the same refrain, which is then repeated at the end of each stanza.ย The ghazal consists of at least five, but often up to fifteeen, two-line stanzas.Each stanza should be independent, but should tie together with the whole. (Like a pearl on a necklace) The first two lines end with the same refrain. This refrain is repeated at the end of each stanza. The final stanza is a signature, where the author can use his/her name to seal the poem.The lines should be of similar length and rhythm. Themes are traditionally melancholy, introspective, loving, longing and thoughtful and in the Sufi tradition of Hafiz, directed to the Beloved [Source: Poetic Metre and Form: Octavia Wynne]

I never wrote one before, so I loosely used a renga structure of two lines to compose the couplet stanzas. It’s a rigorous form, but it’s highly rewarding! Come join the fun!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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17 responses to “A Whisper in the Wind: a #ghazal #renga soliloquy for #dversepoets”

  1. paul scribbles Avatar

    Form is emptiness. Emptiness is form. I love this Frank.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Paul! I appreciate it! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  2. Beverly Crawford Avatar
    Beverly Crawford

    I love the phrase “Whisper in the wind”. There’s a sadness in your poem, and a loneliness.

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  3. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    It sounds like some alienation occurred as the result of words and it leads to silence and the wind.

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-Wade Avatar
    Rosemary Nissen-Wade

    I think it’s lovely!

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  5. kim881 Avatar

    I agree that t’s a rigorous form, Frank, and I like the way you tackled it to create your windily lyrical ghazal.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Kim! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  6. merrildsmith Avatar

    Lyrical, the refrain becomes poignant.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Merril! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  7. Kathy Reed Avatar

    I wonder about that one decision…..is it ever too quiet.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Not even the wisest can tell…๐Ÿ˜‰

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  8. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    The melancholy is so strong… even though I think you will find something more in that wind.

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  9. purplepeninportland Avatar

    I can hear the wind whisper through the rooms of this lonely poem. Beautiful, Frank.

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  10. Bekkie Sanchez Avatar

    Lonely words and echoes of something else?

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Only the narratorโ€”not the poetโ€”can say. ๐Ÿ˜‰

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