Animus: a #MonokuMonday (10/16/2017) water #haibun for #dversepoets #HaibunMonday and #withrealtoads (5/31/18)




A six-person river raft bobbing up and down in the frigid Animus River. A paddle stretched out too far. One rapid, knocking me overboard.

beyond white foam so many spruces

Break the surface. Still holding the safety line circling the raft. My face, slapped by the river. Again. Again. Back under. Bubbles from my last breath. Jagged rocks scrape my back. One clear thought: I could die here.

river’s roar any moment the call to let go

Hands press my shoulders down. I ricochet above the rapids. Those same hands — my friend and raft partner — pull me aboard.

more paddling last rapids left behind



first published in Image Curve, April 16, 2015

Photograph by Andrew Spencer



Bjorn hosts Haibun Monday over at dVerse Poets Pub. He asks for a haibun featuring water.


UPDATED (5/31/18): Sanaa, over at Real Toads, imagines Water Under The Bridge ~

32 replies »

  1. I felt that moment of “I might die here” as the water swept you under. So well written. Last weekend, a 52 year old woman died here surfing, just that quickly. She was here to attend her daughter’s wedding, and died saving her younger daughter – they didnt realize that the tide had made that spot deadly. So tragic. The water has such power.

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  2. I have yet to canoe gently over our little mountain creeks – I can’t imagine the fear you describe here… (makes for great photography though!)

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