Miles from Innisfree: A #haibun response to Yeats…#haiku #poetry #dversepoets #writephoto

Jilly serves up the poetry as a guest pub tender at dVerse. She challenges us to write a response poem, a poem that directly replies to another poem. When I saw Sue Vincent’s Thursday Photo Prompt–distant, I thought of Yeats’ The Lake Isle of Innisfree. I knew he and I needed to talk!

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The Lake Isle of Innisfree

W. B. Yeats,ย 1865ย –ย 1939

I will arise and go now, and go to Innisfree,
And a small cabin build there, of clay and wattles made:
Nine bean-rows will I have there, a hive for the honey-bee;
And live alone in the bee-loud glade.

And I shall have some peace there, for peace comes dropping slow,
Dropping from the veils of the morning to where the cricket sings;
There midnightโ€™s all a glimmer, and noon a purple glow,
And evening full of the linnetโ€™s wings.

I will arise and go now, for always night and day
I hear lake water lapping with low sounds by the shore;
While I stand on the roadway, or on the pavements grey,
I hear it in the deep heartโ€™s core.

 

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Miles from Innisfree

I, too, will rise, but I am miles from Innisfree. I am beside these standing stones that mark a bog’s edge. Water pierces the sea of its entrapping grass like a drowning swimmer. No soft footprints along what passes for a shore, save my own.

Where is my path forward? The bog yields no trail or solid ground. And beyond it, a line of trees before dark foothills–themselves towered over by whitecaps.

Where will I make my cabin? Where, my bean rows and honey hive? Where will I hearย  lake waters lapping along a serene shore? Not in a heart too disturbed by the terrible beauty before me.

sweeping clouds …

still walking the long path

to Innesfree

 

 

 

 

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34 responses to “Miles from Innisfree: A #haibun response to Yeats…#haiku #poetry #dversepoets #writephoto”

  1. merrildsmith Avatar

    I love this Yeats poem, and I never would have thought to respond to it this way. Beautiful!

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  2. Waltermarks Avatar

    Your haiku was a excellent answer to W.B. Yeats dreamworld. Yours a stark reality, his a dream longed for!

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  3. jillys2016 Avatar

    Breathtaking beauty in your words and the images that you create, Frank. This line “Water pierces the sea of its entrapping grass like a drowning swimmer” had me rereading to savor its perfection. The questions you pose are of great depth, and of course- master of the Haiku – that leaves a grand and empty longing. Excellent response to an excellnt poem.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you, Jilly! Iโ€™m undone by this high praise! ๐Ÿ˜€

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      1. jillys2016 Avatar

        Wait… there’s a song for that… can you guess who sang it? (hahaha!)

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  4. Victoria C. Slotto Avatar

    You chose a wonderful poem to begin with and then followed it with a haibun that so well expresses that longing deep within us to find our true “at home” place. Much enjoyed.

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  5. Janice Avatar

    You chose a beautiful poem and your response matches very well with another emotional/spiritual reality.

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  6. rothpoetry Avatar

    You are going to have to get out of the bog to build your house!! I loved the grass being trapped by the piercing sea water.
    Dwight

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  7. Suzanne Avatar
    Suzanne

    What a beautiful response to the Yeats poem (one of my favourites too). Your haiku at the end says it all really – like you I am still walking that long road to Innisfree.

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  8. anuragbakhshi Avatar

    What a beautiful response to a lovely poem.

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  9. Jane Dougherty Avatar

    You played this one well, Frank. A haibun is response to verse that reads like poetic prose. Lovely.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you, Jane! ๐Ÿ˜€

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar

        Pleasure ๐Ÿ™‚

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  10. Frank Hubeny Avatar

    I liked this sentence: “Not in a heart too disturbed by the terrible beauty before me.” It is not just moving the physical heart to Innisfree.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Frank! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  11. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    I really love how you poured some real issues into the beauty…. but it can be beautiful even if the paths are blocked by bogs.

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  12. qbit Avatar

    Fantastic. I like how you challenge Yeat’s simplicity with uncertainly.

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  13. nosaintaugustine Avatar

    That first stanza- hoo! What a sparklingly unique image you crafted. Well played!

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  14. Grace Avatar

    I like the different perspective and response to Yeat’s classic poem ~ Thanks for joining our challenge ~

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  15. Charley Avatar

    I love the twist on Yeats’. Well done!

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      1. Charley Avatar

        You are welcome!

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  16. Singledust Avatar

    I adore your haiku and Yeats is the poet of my heart. you captured his mysticism in your haiku and the lines flowed into each other. so rare to read a haiku that flows like this without halting. beautiful.

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  17. Bekkie Sanchez Avatar

    Very nice! I love micro poetry.

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  18. rivrvlogr Avatar

    A nice mantra for one seeking inspiration, finding it, and taking a path to fulfill it.

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  19. katiemiafrederick Avatar

    Silence
    oF Nature
    Roar oF Free
    WiTHiN
    Peace
    oF Energy
    ReLiveD aS onE..:)

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  20. Sue Vincent Avatar

    Beautiful, Frank.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Sue! ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ˜€

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  21. Leslie Avatar

    Beautiful – the images, the Yeats, and your response. Thank you for all of it.

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