Edvard Munch [Public domain or Public domain], via Wikimedia Commons
You would not understand were you still on my side of the veil. I only hope that on your side, you do, and will forgive me for bearing witness. Just as I hope to someday forgive you.
Three AM
you dare scream my name
wake me up
so I see
you, a horror before me
sprawled on the cold floor
And what was I, but a child courting adolescence? Why did you think I could save you? You, who shredded my dignity with every poisoned word from Absolute-odored breath?
Why did you think I wanted to?
Of course, I did. The fact that I could do nothing tormented me, inspite of the impossibility of my making a meaningful intervention.
How could a pubescent boy stop a grown man driven to the edge?
twilight mist
around the headstone
both your names
soon obscured
now you rest so quietly
peacefully, at last
Accept my petunias in the summer, my wreath in the winter. May I lay down the remains of my grief with my next gift. Some day.
Dusk
a fox’s cry
in the dark
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dVerse MTB: Phantom form–Shardorma, Amaya pubtending
Poets United–midweek motif–scream
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Beautiful! And agonising. A wonderful combination of the three prompts, and of haibun and shadorma. Your final haiku is perfection.
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Thanks, Rosemary!
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A very sad poem that conveys both drama and trauma very well— cool use of the form also. Thanks.
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Thank you!
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A very sad poem that conveys both drama and trauma very well— cool use of the form also. Thanks.
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This shadorma prose is beautiful. A poignant tale.
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Thanks, Vivian!
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😊…my pleasure!
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A powerful write from beginning to end.
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Thanks, Janice!
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A really great piece Frank! Sadly Beautiful. Looking back lives a lot of what ifs!
Dwight
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Thanks, Dwight! 😀
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The ending haiku is wonderful. I love that fox’s cry in the dark.
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Thanks, Toni. 😀 I find that fox’s cry haunting!
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As do I, like the sounds of owls and other critters at night.
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This is stunning, especially the haiku. Wonderful, Frank.
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Thanks, Sherry! 😀
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‘scream’ is so faint and almost tiptoeing in tune with the horror and sadness…So very well put.
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Thanks, Sumana!
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I love the way you have combined the prompts and forms, Frank. You’ve included various screams, too: I’m familiar with the three am scream, the adolescent scream and the fox’s cry in the dark, but oh, that silent scream of grief is so deeply felt.
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Thanks, Kim!
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This shadorma prose is beautifully haunting!!💞
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Thanks, Sanaa!
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A haunting story of a boy, then man, haunted. This line spoke so much to me,
“May I lay down the remains of my grief with my next gift. Some day.” And then followed by the haiku, almost as if the boy is resolved to forever hear those screams, even if there’s a vague hope that he won’t have to. Great writing, Frank!
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Thanks, Amaya! 😀
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I don’t even know where to begin…. I read the poetry (forms) first, then read the entirety. Each piece I read as a stand-alone. Then I re-read the whole. Bravo.
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Thanks, Charley!
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You are welcome!
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Frank, this is one of the most heart-rending pieces I have read. Beautiful and sad and all too real.
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Thanks, Linda!
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A poignant piece. But what remarkable skill to put together these poetic forms! Very impressive.
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Thank you, Khaya! 😀
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The shadorma works so well into the haibun… such a sorrowful image of taking care of a parent like that (in life and in death)
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Thanks, Bjorn!
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This brought tears to my eyes. Your haiku at the end is perfection. Well done, Frank!
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Thanks, Sarah!
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partial to the final haiku ! and I like your thoughts in between each. Sorrowfully yet wonderfully written.
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Thanks, Margaret!
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Lovely work! I love foxes!
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Ironically for me sorrow can bring out my best writing. Great work!
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Honest clarity:
Forgiveness,
A nice thought,
Breathes only if forged in pain.
Beautifully Frank.
– 💜 This. Thanks. Lona.
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Thank you, Lona! 🙂
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