Arboreal Instruction: a #Kyoka-prose #haibun

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Thump! A branch fell from the maple beside the deck. It struck the lawn a foot away from the fire pit. One whole branch broke into three pieces and several shards of bark.

There were no leaves on the branch. Black rot exude throughout, and from the stump that remained from where it once grew out of the trunk. The rest of the tree thrives, even with the blight that she has endured for years.

There is a lesson here.

surrendering

what no longer serves is

true survival

“Everything I let go of

had claw marks on it”

for COLLEENโ€™S 2020 WEEKLY #TANKA TUESDAY #POETRY CHALLENGE NO. 188, #THEMEPROMPT

and Poets and Storytellers United’s Writers’ Pantry #31: Here comes August!

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23 responses to “Arboreal Instruction: a #Kyoka-prose #haibun”

  1. Jane Dougherty Avatar

    Now I have to look up kyoka…

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Glad I could help. ๐Ÿ˜‰

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      1. Jane Dougherty Avatar

        It’s always interesting to discover other poetry forms.

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  2. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    This is absolutely stunning, Frank! There truly is wisdom in surrendering to what no longer serves us ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. sanaarizvi Avatar
      sanaarizvi

      *surrendering what no longer serves us..* keeps the toxicity out of our lives .. yes ๐Ÿ’

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      1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

        Indeed! ๐Ÿ™‚

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    2. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Sanaa! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  3. Ron. Avatar

    Great, deep write, Frank & frankly written. We’re all the tree, at some times or others, and also the branch, sooner or later..

    Phenomenal.

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thank you, Ron! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  4. Colleen M. Chesebro Avatar

    Ohhhh… Haijin Sensei, you’ve taught me a new form! So, the Kyoka is a derivative of the 5/7/5/7/7 tanka, but with “most of the humor found either in placing the vulgar or mundane in an elegant, poetic setting or by treating a classical subject with common language or attitudes.” https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ky%C5%8Dka. Interesting!

    Also, it talks about a parody: A parody, also called a spoof, a send-up, a take-off, a lampoon, a play on, a caricature or a joke, is a work which is created to imitate, make fun of or comment on an original workโ€”its subject, author, style or some other targetโ€”by means of satiric or ironic imitation. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Parody

    Why is this piece not tanka prose? Is it because you’ve used a parody?

    I love the wisdom of the kyoka (tanka) portion. This last part: โ€œEverything I let go of had claw marks on itโ€ is so full of meaning!

    Brilliant!

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      Thanks, Colleen.

      Regarding Tanka or Kyoka:

      To be honest: human confusion! When I wrote the Tanka, I somehow thought that, like haiku, Tanka required a nature reference. Since I didnโ€™t have one, and since kyoka is to senryu what Tanka is to haiku, I classified my poem as Kyoka-prose.

      I can see it going either way. Since I used that quote in the last two lines, however, the five-lines verse has a tongue-in-cheek quality that seals the deal for my classifying it as kyoka.

      Iโ€™m happy that you liked it! ๐Ÿ˜€

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      1. Colleen M. Chesebro Avatar

        Fascinating! The only thing I found was that tanka was more serious but didnโ€™t need a nature kigo. So, that means youโ€™re on the right path with your classification. How cool! โค๏ธ

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  5. divalounger Avatar
    divalounger

    Loved this Frank–surrender is difficult at best!

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  6. Beverly Crawford Avatar
    Beverly Crawford

    Ah the wisdom gleaned from a fallen branch! Good to be aware.

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  7. Rosemary Nissen-Wade Avatar

    Yes, nicely illustrated wisdom.

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  8. Humblekind Poet Avatar

    good lesson to know. thanks!

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  9. oldegg Avatar

    We are often attached to memories that really have no relevance any more, but that former person is always with us..

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  10. jazzytower Avatar

    I really like the deeper meaning in this Frank. I’m getting the explanation of why you labeled it a Kyoka-prose. I stay confused with the nuances of these forms. I usually take the path that none of it is set in stone.

    Pat

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      I also interpret the differences loosely. Thanks, Pat! ๐Ÿ˜€

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  11. […] Frank Tassone Shares an unknown form for most of us called a kyoka! It’s a relative to the tanka. I’ll have to investigate this one in more detail. […]

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  12. magicalmysticalteacher Avatar
    magicalmysticalteacher

    Better claw marks than teeth marks?

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    1. Frank J. Tassone Avatar

      LOL! Indeed! Thanks, MMT! ๐Ÿ™‚

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  13. Raivenne Avatar

    “surrendering

    what no longer serves is

    true survival”

    Goodness knows that was a life lesson that took so long, too long to learn! Spot on insight.

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