haikai

“sunset…” a #jisey (11/19/20)

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sunset

and still, my ripples

entertwine yours

after this dragon-ride

the ecstasy of rest

I hosting over at dVerse, where we write Jisei (Japanese Death Poems). The pub is open! Come join us!

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23 replies »

  1. So like the play between stillness and movement – trembling – in this. The comma after ‘still’ – is like both a breath and a joining with the other – life/death – day/night – lover/lover. After that the poem rushes on to the final ‘rest’.

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  2. I think the invocation of sunset as a symbol of the end of life is very powerful. But you’ve written this in such a way that your words could apply as well as life as to death. Skilfully done!

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