Thunderstruck: an #AmericanSentence #haibun

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She straightens her hair. Her hands guide the flattening iron as its jaws clench on locks of wavy hair. Snippets of steam rise before she draws the iron down and then grasps another strand.

There must be some occasion. But it’s too early for our newphew’s wedding.

Lightening dances across thunderheads that encroach the sky. The distant rumble follows their illumination. I ignore it, engrossed with watching her transformation.

Almost forgetting how she mourns. The dirth of referrals that is her practice’s life’s blood. Her friends left behind on the west shore of the Hudson. The house we called home for nineteen years.

She finishes. Her auburn-highlighed brown hair rests below her shoulder. She smiles, glances at the thigh-high, 8-inch platform heeled boots I bought her.

“To be pretty for you I have dropped two seeds of turnsole in the dark of both eyes.”

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7 responses to “Thunderstruck: an #AmericanSentence #haibun”

  1. kim881 Avatar

    I like the way you left the prompt line to the end, building suspense throughout your prosery piece, Frank. You even made the flattening iron sound dangerous!

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  2. Bjรถrn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    How creative to use the given line as an american sentence… to me the twist is those shoes which made me think of the narrator as a pimp.

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  3. petrujviljoen Avatar

    I thought of how love stayed alive through all the years.

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  4. sanaarizvi Avatar
    sanaarizvi

    This is exquisitely woven, Frank! Wow! I think it’s truly creative of you to use the line by Duarte as an American sentence. Love it! Thank you so much for writing to the prompt ๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ’–

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  5. Reena Saxena Avatar

    I shuddered at the thought of eight inch heels ๐Ÿ˜‚

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  6. Sherry Marr Avatar
    Sherry Marr

    Me, too, re the eight inch heels. Smiles. You painted the scene so well.

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  7. msjadeli Avatar

    She loves him first and foremost and is willing to set the rest aside for him. If that is not love, I don’t know what is. Nicely textured tale that has the ring of truth about it.

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